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Six years old,

tired and cold

a girl stood with rags and bruises.

She turned to stare,

tried not to care

beside her the mommy who always uses.

She happened to see,

a mother of three

tied down by the 'devils' on her sleeve.

The little girl asked,

desire well masked

why must they ruin Christmas Eve?

No answer ever came,

only silence to blame

and mommy walked on without one word.

The little girl followed,

a large gulp now swallowed

left her question hanging and simply unheard.

- KB

The title is actually relevant to the poem itself.

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HeartlessTales Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is such a beautiful poem. It is very sad, but very true and free of deceit. You portrayed this beautifully. Keep on writing, the world needs to see more pieces of art like this.
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Amerfere Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the comment! I'm glad you enjoyed reading this piece, and I certainly plan to continue writing.

I hope you have grasped the true meaning behind each word, since I tried a very different approach from what I am used to.
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HeartlessTales Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome.

I certainly did grasp meaning from every word. That's what made it so great, the fact that there was a meaning. Some poets throw words onto a piece of paper and make them rhyme. This actually has true feeling to it. This is a literary steak. I've encountered many literary "cabbages" so to speak and I prefer work with meaning. I like your work and I pride you on taking a different approach. It obviously worked. :)
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Amerfere Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm definitely a fan of writing, but I always have a meaning for every single thing I write. Nothing is just thrown onto paper, as I prefer trying to grasp a concept that could possibly relate to anyone in this world.
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Amerfere Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm definitely a fan of writing, but I always have a meaning for every single thing I write. Nothing is just thrown onto paper, as I prefer trying to grasp a concept that could possibly relate to anyone in this world.
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HeartlessTales Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That is a great way to view writing, I like your perspective, it is one that we share. Why write if it is not able to be related to? People search for relation in writing. That's probably why I enjoyed this so much.
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